Sorry, but while I am absolutely willing to make corrections, I am afraid I draw the line at rewriting my text...and I hope you understand.
In terms of content, omitting the mention addition of
Fragile, I don't see much difference between what you have written and what I have:
I am saying pretty much the same thing, albeit in a different order and using "ultimately" rather than "eventually," which afaic are interchangeable. I didn't (and still don't) feel the need to suggest it was an appetite whetter [sic], as I was more interested in identifying that it introduced a number of stylistic signatures, as in epic song-writing, Howe's stylistic breadth as a guitarist and Anderson's ability to write shorter forms that, to some extent, challenged typical pop song-writing convention, which is how I continue after that sentence.
So, thanks again for pointing out the need to indicate the platinum status wasn't achieved at the time, but beyond that, I'm not prepared to make your other changes as those fall into the category of what
you would like to see rather than what
I intended to articulate...
And I hope you understand. I am absolutely not thin-skinned about folks pointing out errors that need to be fixed, as I think I've demonstrated here at PE a number of times; but when it comes to changing the prose, especially when it alters both voice and intent? Sorry, but I'm just not prepared to go that far.
Best!
John
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